Talk:RELEASE: Beat high housing costs: homestead the high seas

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Some thoughts

Here are my initial responses, ranging from trivial typing errors to some comments on the overall tone:

  • Consider starting off on a positive note, rather than setting the stage with the worries over housing price. However, I currently somewhat lean toward the opening as it now exists; this is just another possibility.
  • I like the clever twist in tying Seasteading to a solution to that problem.
  • typo: "Aa study..."
  • "...the median inflation-adjusted price of a Seattle house rose from $221,000 to $447,800. According to that study fully $200,000 of that increase was the result of land-use regulations."
    • instead of "rose," I'd say "more than doubled."
    • which year's dollars are those? "from $221,000 to $447,800, measured in today's dollars"?
    • Phrasing: "According to that study fully $200,000 of that increase was the result of land-use regulations. " -> "According to the study, fully $200,000 of that increase resulted from land-use regulations."
  • "land-use regulations" or "land use regulations", it should stay consistent.
  • "land based" -> "land-based"
  • Tone: I love the voice of capitalism, but maybe some of the lines could sound more touchy-feely rather than celebrating the ability to avoid regulations. Or at least emphasize that the benefits of avoiding regulations and buying cheap labor and materials involve touchy-feely things like helping to end poverty.
  • The Netherlands paragraph is excellent.
  • Is there a good way to pre-empt some of the common but uninteresting objections? Or is it best just to ignore it? Or maybe it's even a bonus, having readers hypothesizing various possible outcomes of Seasteading...

Overall, I think it's quite good, and that it would make a useful press release.

--Daniel 03:33, 24 August 2008 (UTC)